[Fan Fiction] The Greatest Thief (9/29/04-Part 3 of Scene1 up!)

evanASF27 08-07-2004 10:46 PM
Well sorry to say but I haven't finished Part 4 yet...BUT! I do have something new for everybody Smile

ILLUSTRATIONS!!

To make a long story short, M.S._Feather has become part of this fanfic team Big Grin She's agreed to illustrate the whole fanfic for me ^_^ I'm very glad to have her drawing my fanfic and I'm very impressed with her talents! I'll be posting more when she has drawn more Wink THANK YOU M.S. FEATHER! Smile )

(TO LEFT <- READ RIGHT<- PLEASE)


The Big Finale 08-07-2004 11:04 PM
That's spectacular! Actually, I'd like to offer my services as a colorist. I could color these comic pages, if you'd like.
Pygmalion 08-07-2004 11:15 PM
This looks like fun. I hope there will be more soon!

Pygmalion
evanASF27 08-07-2004 11:17 PM
quote:
Originally posted by Big Finale
That's spectacular! Actually, I'd like to offer my services as a colorist. I could color these comic pages, if you'd like.

Talk with M.S._Feather...though I think she had someone in mind already...not sure though ^^;;;

Pygmalion- There will be more next week Smile
M.S. Feather 08-07-2004 11:23 PM
quote:
Originally posted by Big Finale
That's spectacular! Actually, I'd like to offer my services as a colorist. I could color these comic pages, if you'd like.

Yeah, I already asked someone else to look into that. But if they decline I'll let you know. Wink
The Big Finale 08-07-2004 11:47 PM
Aww... oh well. I'll be waiting!
pen1300 08-08-2004 10:10 AM
Oh nifty! I'm looking forward to more!

Later,
Pen1300
NukuNuko77 08-08-2004 12:32 PM
quote:
Originally posted by pen1300
Oh nifty! I'm looking forward to more!



me too
evanASF27 08-10-2004 10:58 PM
First two pages





Along with a bit of M.S._Feather's fanart Smile Her take on the great LupinIII.
M.S. Feather 08-11-2004 06:28 AM
quote:
Originally posted by evanASF27
Along with a bit of M.S._Feather's fanart Smile Her take on the great LupinIII.


Hello, what's this...
Awwwww, I wasn't finiiiiiiiiiiiiished! *continues to cry like a little beyotch*
Nah, I guess it's OK. But just to let everyone know that's going to be the cover.
evanASF27 08-23-2004 10:40 PM
Pages 3 & 4






*EDIT*
Also...a little update as to the what happening with the rest of the fanfic. I've come up with an ending and I'm in the process of figuring out the megadeus battle scene (which is basically scene 4). The ending will shock you and will most likely make me end up writing a sequal and then giving up and passing it onto somebody else cos I'm too busy with schoolwork.
evanASF27 08-26-2004 09:38 PM
I've finished Scene 4 of my story. Tonight and tomorrow I plan on working on scene 5 and try to finish this fanfic once and for all x_X. Get ready cos I'm going to edit scene 4 into this post very soon. It's not long but at least it's something. The action and the ending happens in scene 5...
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Scene 4


Inspector Zenigata woke up groggily on a bench at the Military Police’s headquarters the next day. Having gotten a cup of coffee, he headed towards Dan Dastun’s office. After waiting a few minutes, Dastun walked out with some paperwork. He stopped and looked down at the Inspector.

"Oh it’s you."

"Sorry for bothering you Sir, but I was just wondering…"

"I know what you’re going to ask, Inspector. And the answer is no, we haven’t found or heard anything of that guy you were chasing."

Zenigata grumbled...he had no idea where to look, and he was still refusing to believe that Lupin was gone. He tipped his hat to Dastun and then walked down to entrance. He had not taken two steps out of the doors when an alarm rang loudly and officers all over the station started running towards the garage. Zenigata was startled, to say the least. He went over to an officer and asked what the hell was going on...but the officer didn’t reply and ran off.

"What the hell is going on here!! Damn it all."

Huge tank-like vehicles rolled out of the garage and then sped away towards one of the domes. Zenigata ran over to the garage and then jumped on top of one of the tanks, he was going to find out what was going on even if it killed him.


*Meanwhile, back at Roger’s place*

Roger Smith was sitting on the couch listening to Dorothy play the piano. Norman looked out the windows...his eyes widened.

"Master Roger!"

"Yes, what is it Norman?"

"Uhh I think you should see this, Sir."

"Hmm?"

Dorothy stopped playing and then looked up. Roger got up and then walked over to the window and peered out over the city. He was astonished and then become very serious.

"Norman I’ll be returning late tonight."

"Oh. Sir, shall I prepare dinner for you then?"

Roger nodded as he turned to head for the staircase. Dorothy got up from the piano bench.

"Roger."

"Uh, yes Dorothy?"

"Roger, be careful."

It was an awkward moment. Roger, slightly startled, began to say something but then sighed and ran down the stairs. Dorothy watched him go. Norman looked at Dorothy, sighed, and then followed Roger down.

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The sun was setting on the city of Amnesia. The domes had cast shadows into the lifeless field of JFK Mark. Out of one of the giant ruins steps a megadeus. The military police units pulled to a stop at the gates and begin firing into the darkness with Colonel Dan Dastun leading the attack. Inspector Zenigata had carefully gotten off his ‘tank’ and was now watching the action from a safe distance...hidden behind a trash can some twenty feet from the units. Big O’s footsteps can be heard approaching the lines of military police. Dastun looks back and sighs.

"Why does he always have to interfere?"

The black megadeus steps over the military police and stands there ready. Big O lifts one arm up, then the other. Roger looks out into the darkness...his eyes widen as he looks at the size of his enemy. The megadeus was taller the Big O for sure, but Roger was willing to fight it either way. Big O clashes its fists together and fires a giant beam of red, its Chromebuster, into the darkness at the mysterious megadeus.



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And that's it for the moment...Remember, there's still a scene 5 on the way, so don't think it's over any time soon! @_@
M.S. Feather 08-26-2004 11:11 PM
Aw, that was kinda' short. *fidgets in her seat*
Can't wait to see the final scene...and that shocking ending. O.O
evanASF27 08-26-2004 11:21 PM
quote:
Originally posted by M.S._Feather
Aw, that was kinda' short. *fidgets in her seat*
Can't wait to see the final scene...and that shocking ending. O.O

yah I know x_X But there wasn't much too that scene...and I figured that it would have been too long with the megadeus fight scene in it.

Well we'll see. If I write scene 5 and it turns out to be too short then I'll just stick in on to Scene 4 instead. Embarrassed Sweatdrop



The ending's gonna kill ya Tongue
IamRogerSmith 08-27-2004 04:53 PM
Hah! Thats awesome!!!!
evanASF27 08-29-2004 06:47 PM
Scene 5


Big O’s Chromebuster strikes something in front of the enemy megadeus and dissipates. The enemy apparently had an energy shield of some sort and Roger was taken quite off guard by this.

"You’re nothing more than a coward hiding in the shadows," Roger shouted.

"I wouldn’t judge a book by its cover now Roger Smith. I have evaded the cops countless times and I even get out of the tightest situations with a souvenir!"

By now Roger has seen enough of the megadeus through the light of the Chromebuster to conclude that it was a Big. It was designed, from the looks of it, to be either a prototype for Big O, or...possibly its successor. It had arm pistons and arm shields, however it lacked the stylish helmet that the Big O had. Instead it had a smoother more 'upside-down bowl' like helmet with long sideburn like structures down the sides of the head. Its legs were like Big Duo's however the feet were obscured, but they were there. In the wind the chest seemed to move...however as the Big stepped out of the shadows coming a little closer to Big O, it was made clear that the megadeus was wearing a giant coat-like armor. It protected most of the upper arms, from the shoulders to the elbows, as well as the chest area with the exception of the cockpit glass and the ribs that made the abdomen.
The enemy Big took out a huge pistol like cannon, something the Negotiator had never seen before on a megadeus, and the piston shot a bright beam of energy at Big O. It made a deep cut on the side of the face plate.


Inside the cockpit of the mystery Big there was some laughing. There inside the glass covered cockpit of the strange megadeus was Lupin the 3rd, Fujiko, Jigen, and Goemon. Lupin was seated in the control chair.

"Hehehehehehee! I TOLD you it was real."

"Man Lupin this is fr*gg*n awesome."

"Now hold on Jigen. I this doesn’t feel right. I sense that there is something about this machine that we do not fully understand yet."

"Oh like what Goemon?"

Goemon shrugs, he knows there’s something more to this megadeus than meets the eye, however, he cannot figure out what it was exactly. Lupin looks out towards the black megadeus. He pushes down the pedals, the Big responds by powering up. Its eyes flash a dark color and then the megadeus walks forward towards the lines of Military Police, but more importantly, towards the other Big. Lupin swings a joystick back, the megadeus pulls back its arm and fires out its arm piston; Lupin pushes the joystick forward quickly and presses the button on top of the stick, the Big still running headlong at Big O throws the punch, lands it on Big O arm shields, and then hammers down the piston. Big O is forced back by the blow and buildings nearby are damaged from the blast.

"Oh yah OH YAH!! I was born to do this. Come on Big Lupin let’s get this guy."

"Big Lupin?"

"Yes Fujiko, what’s wrong with the name ~_~"

"Nothing, jeez someone’s really full of himself."

Lupin ignores her and continues throwing punches at Big O. Roger, who can see Lupin in the cockpit via monitor, soon began to regret doubting that Inspector. Big O then stops and punches Big Lupin, so hard in fact that it sends the Big flying backwards. Roger pulls back his left hand, and lifts his hand from the control stick. It then folds down and flips over revealing a new joystick. Roger pulls the stick down hard as Big O’s arm busts open into four panels. The O-Thunder fires as the joystick stops at the bottom and a barrage of energy blasts streak towards the red coated Big. It holds up its arm shields and the barrage hits it, the Big straining under the force of the attack. The ring created from the cannons in Big O’s arm then travels out and hits Big Lupin creating a massive ball of flames. Dastun at that exact moment orders his troop to fire. A dozen shells sore into the flames and strike Big Lupin, causing minimal damage...all the while Inspector Zenigata looks on dumbfounded.

"Damn...great Lupin has one of those things too. I knew it. *he looks up at Big O* *groan* Come on, get him...just don’t kill him."

The red megadeus' eyes shine through the flames. Its pilot, the master thief, Lupin the third, struggles to figure out all of its weapons.

"ARRGH!! Where the hell are the weapons on this thing!?"

"Why don’t you just read the manual, Lupin?"

"Oh shut up Goemon. Things this old don’t HAVE manuals...DAMN IT! *slams his fist on a panel*"

The panel opens up revealing rows of buttons. Lupin, after pondering it for a moment, then slams his hand on all of them. The ribs of Big Lupin open up revealing missile bays. Zenigata gasps at the sight and hides inside the trash can pulling the lid over it, sealing it shut. Dastun orders all his men to retreat and they do so quickly. As Dastun looks back he sees Big O open up its missile bays. "Oh no..." he thinks. The missiles fire from Big Lupin and rocket toward Big O. Big O fires all of its missiles and they collide head on with the others. The blast from them sends Zenigata’s trash can flying back some fifty feet and the vehicles the Military Police were fleeing in, swerving.

The smoke clears and the Bigs stare at each other, watching, waiting for the other to make its move. Zenigata scrambles out of his totaled trash can and then looks at the two megadeuses. He shuts his eyes and screams.

"DAMN IT!! This isn’t getting us anywhere!"

Roger blinks and then looks down at the monitor in front of him, staring at the angered Inspector. Lupin too looks down at Zenigata.

"Huh?! Z-ZENIGATA?! What the hell’s he doing here?!!"

Zenigata raises his hand to his mouth.

"That’s it...Big Zenigata get over here!!"

Roger+Lupin: "Big...what?! O_O"

A noise is heard from high above them, their megadeuses tilt their heads upwards to see a trail or condensed vapor in the sky. A megadeus then lands between them, facing Big Lupin. The jets in its legs fold back in and the armor slides over them. The megadeus is brown all over except fro its head, hands, and feet. The feet are painted black and the head wears something like a giant hat. It too has arm pistons and looks very much like the Big O, however it is unlike either Big O or Big Lupin; it wears a giant armored trench coat. Roger is kind of uneasy of this point. Lupin and the gang stare completely in shock at the sight. Dastun looks back and sees the brown megadeus and he nearly stumbles over in surprise.

(Roger) "Inspector?! Y-you have a megadeus?"

(Zenigata) "Interpol’s been designing it for some time now. Never thought we'd have to use it though."

*roger face faults*

"Now then...Lupin! You’re mine! Get you’re a** over here!!"

"What?! You’ve got to be kidding me! Pops, how can you pilot that thing?"

"Does it really matter? *Big Zenigata takes out a pair of megadeus sized handcuffs* You’re under arrest Lupin!"

Big Lupin jumps and turns around. It runs away at top speed across JFK Mark. Big Zenigata follows with its handcuffs in hand. As they disappear over the horizon, Roger and Dastun are left still in an awkward state. As Big O goes underground, Roger walks up to Dastun. They look at each other with dumb expressions on their faces and then walk together into the Speakeasy.

Across the barren desert walks a lonely man. His red coat flaps in the wind...he stops at the edge of the desert and looks out over the city. He puts down the giant cross he was carrying, and adjusts his glasses. He’s never seen such a city, it had huge domes and no plants to speak of. The tall man looks over his shoulder. Two women about 200 yards behind him and struggling to get through the sand...He smiles and then heads down into the city. Meanwhile hundreds of miles away, a sinister looking man watches him through a TV screen and laughs maniacally.

"The stage is set for you," the evil man whispers as he turns off the TV, "Mister Vash the Stampede."


**FIN **
Dude Love 08-29-2004 06:59 PM
Well done, Evan. Good show.

Big Grin Zenigata with a megadeus...
Pygmalion 08-29-2004 07:38 PM
Oh, Evan, what an appropriate ending. I almost forgive you for upstaging poor Roger Drooling

Pygmalion
M.S. Feather 08-30-2004 02:14 AM
LOL!
Awesome ending. XD
You did a fantastic job keeping the cast in character throughout the story. Good job, can’t wait to see more of your work. Pleased
evanASF27 08-30-2004 09:35 PM
thanks all Big Grin I'm glad a few of the people in this forum like it. The sequel to this won't be started for a while cos I'm gonna be making a Lupin and Beck crossover. (I know M.S._Feather will like that Wink )

However even before that I might write a short document detailing Schwarzwald's finds. One day, actually yesterday Roll Eyes , I was pondering about death and then how it relates to us who are searching for it...Schwarzwald was looking for the Truth...my next "story" if you will, will detail what he found (or part of it).