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Originally posted by The Fallen Phoenix
I must say, I really must applaud Tifaria's excellent portrayal of Beck and Angel's interaction...she's done an excellent job up to this point, but I particularly liked how she managed it in her previous post.
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Aww, thanks! I've been trying to make their bickering a little more, err.. well, relevant to the story as opposed to the "old married couple"-ish bickering they were doing before.
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Originally posted by Xel
Blee! This REALLY picked up! @.o Um, um, bear with me, folks! I'm a little busy with school, but I'll try real hard to post sometime this weekend. And AHAHAHA THANK YOU, Tif and Finale, for allowing Alan to take *cough* care of Beck... *rubs hands together sinisterly* |
Muahaha! Yes, "take care" of him all you want! If it helps to take control of Beck in your posts, feel free to do so. I've been anticipating some Alan/Beck action almost as much as the Vera/Angel showdown.. although in quite a *cough* different way.
And Big Finale, if you need to write some of Angel's dialogue/actions in your posts, go ahead. I think it'd be hard for either of us to write action scenes without taking some control of each other's characters.
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originally posted by Big Finale
Well, actually, this is more like a rewrite of The Big O II; but the sentiment remains, I'm sure.
-- FP, the "queen" of length? Shades of the Rocky Horror Picture Show there, methinks. Just a sweet transvestitie... Sorry, FP!
-- Thanks for the advice. To be honest, though, I never really liked Tolkien's writing style; the stories he tells I like though.
-- As for characterization, it's not that I want to correct any flaws, it's that I want to be able to act even more like them than I am. Although, there is one thing; I get the feeling I'm portraying them both with worse tempers than they actually have, though I do plan to reveal soon that Alex was acting that way for a purpose; true to form, I haven't yet decided what that purpose is.
One of the major things I'm trying to improve in my characterizations of Alex and Vera are speech patterns. I have the Big O I Complete Collection, so I can watch that and listen to how Alex talks, but I don't have any Season II DVDs (waiting for that Complete Collection), and the transcripts here on Paradigm City don't reach Stripes, so I've had to get by on my (unreliable) memory for Vera (who is, incidentally, my favorite female character. Because she is some freaky kind of imposing, as Tifaria will testify.)
-- Description... it's hard for me to say which way I want to go... I do know that I have a LOT of trouble with describing backgrounds. Unlike you, FP, I'd prefer to move into a more literal way of describing things. Also, writing character's thoughts always seems to bother me somehow as well... I don't know why, but it does. I find myself using that a lot to enlarge my posts when I can't think of anything else to do. Maybe that's why it bugs me. I'm just using it for filler.
I guess what it comes down to is that I really don't know how I want to write. -_-;; |
"Freaky kind of imposing" does not even begin to describe Vera. 0_0 I think you're doing a really wonderful job with her, though, considering that you don't have anything to refer to about her.
I think your descriptions are fine, from what I've read. I tend to prefer a more "dry" style of description too. If it helps, try throwing in details to the description: For example, if you're describing a tree, you might try saying "The tree was tall and leafless, its trunk weathered and peeling off in thick layers." Or something like that. Just try and get as much as you can in there. It doesn't have to be flowery "The tree towered over him like a giant, its leaves shades of emerald against the azure sky" or anything like that.
Err, I forgot where I was going with this... oh! Well, my point was, the little nitty gritty details might help you feel like you're writing more. As for character's thoughts, I don't see them as "filler". Character thoughts are essential to any writing! It lets you understand what's going on in there, and why they're doing what they're doing.
I'd suggest reading a lot. I mean a LOT. If you have a favorite book, or author, read them as many times as you can stand and take their style and mess around with it, and incorporate things into your own writing. It's not terribly noticeable, but I've been trying little variations in my writing every time I post. Also, I tend to compose in my head a lot, wherever I'm at. If I'm at work, I'm writing in my head, or at school, or.. wherever, really. By the time I've got an entire post planned out, I go back to the beginning and start reading it back to myself mentally, over and over, to make sure there aren't parts that sound awkward or anything. Sometimes I might even read it out loud! You'd be surprised how much reading out loud helps.
And, if worse comes to worse, there's always the option of getting someone else to read it for you and tell you what they think. Personally, I'm kind of shy about my writing and I don't tend to show anyone until I post it.
But it might help you, you never know.
So.. yeah. I don't know if any of that helps or not, but there it is.
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I just have a long, drawn out style of writing; Wienberg never misses an oppurtunity to comment on how "fluffy" it is.
Nooo! 