Um. . . I apologize in advance. . .
Rule # 4
EDIT: Ha! I fixed it! Thanks Wingnut. That was embarrasing.
-dork
| Wingnut |
03-19-2004 06:01 PM |
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Originally posted by Dork
Um. . . I apologize in advance. . .
Rule # 4 |
I forgive you for the humor, but not for the grammer and spelling!
| Tony Waynewrong |
03-19-2004 06:08 PM |
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Originally posted by Dork
Um. . . I apologize in advance. . .
Rule # 4 |
Well, if I was Roger Smith, I would definitely give her any kind of compensation she desired, if she decided not to exercise her "privledge".
Nice one, Dork. Kudos.
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Originally posted by Wingnut
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Originally posted by Dork
Um. . . I apologize in advance. . .
Rule # 4
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I forgive you for the humor, but not for the grammer and spelling!
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Okay, what did I screw up?
EDIT: Dammit. Found the spelling errors. I wish Fireworks had a spell-checker. That whole sentence is a freak-fest. Where are the grammar problems?
I swear I would write more stright forward if i could but unfortunatly this is how I talk.
I'm re-doing the image so if you could point out the problems for me. . . ?
-dork
| Wingnut |
03-19-2004 07:51 PM |
"her knew job" should be "her new job" and Underware should be Underwear. Also I would have worded it "Underwear is not a right, but a priviliage.".
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Originally posted by Wingnut
"her knew job" should be "her new job" and Underware should be Underwear. Also I would have worded it "Underwear is not a right, but a priviliage.". |
Didn't even notice the 'knew/new' thing.
Sorry, but I prefer my wording.
I think it sounds less stuffy.
::coughcough::
Three years of creative writing classes will turn you into a bit of prude when it comes to how to word things.
Sorry to be snippy.
Are you sure that's it?
muchlove
-dork
| Wingnut |
03-19-2004 08:04 PM |
Yeah, I think so. As for the ruleing on the wording, that's artist progitive.
| The Baker St. Irregular |
03-19-2004 10:13 PM |
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Originally posted by Rekkoha
Well, this one will catch someone's eye. Mostly people who watched Touched by an Angel.
Touched by a Rosewater: |
(evil-like) Fwuh-fwuh-fwuh-fwuh-fwuh! That's funny.
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Originally posted by Dork
Sorry to be snippy.
Are you sure that's it?
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Ummm... here's the whole thing with correct spelling.
"Dorothy knew she had not fallen into an altogether favorable situation with her new job when she came across the Smith House Rule #4: Underwear is a privilege, not a right."
I personally would change the wording just a little:
"Dorothy knew she had not fallen into an altogether favorable situation with her new job when she discovered Roger Smith's Rule #4: Underwear is a privilege, not a right."
Came across is still just slang at this point... also, I would say Roger Smith's rule because some of them don't just apply to the house itself (like the wearing black, which they must do at all times, not just while they are in the mansion.)
Yes, I was a little unsure of what kind of rule it was.
As for the slang. . . my first creative writing teacher refused to let us use slang in our pieces outside of dialouge(?). The woman had absolultly no imagination, I only took the class so I could get a reference from the teacher to give the creative writing department over at an arts high school in town.
I kinda like slang.
Anywho. . . I don't know what's up with the sexual references lately
::coughcough::
I've always wondered why it couldn't be both. . .
| YZEtc |
03-20-2004 12:11 PM |
Hey, that reminds me of that rock classic:
Glass in Pocket.
Err, wait a minute...
| Christina Perry |
03-20-2004 12:40 PM |
Is Roger eating MY Cookeis?? He's NOT Telling the truth.
| Wingnut |
03-20-2004 01:56 PM |
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Originally posted by Giovannistruelove
Is Roger eating MY Cookeis?? He's NOT Telling the truth. |
That's one situation that not even Big O can get him out of.
I too don't see why it can't be both, Dork.
200th post! Whoo!
::does happy dance::
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With all those wires you'd think she'd be getting something for free. . .
| YZEtc |
03-20-2004 03:18 PM |
I like that idea.
I hope that Roger and Dorothy have a plan set in case the cable TV company comes knocking...
| Tony Waynewrong |
03-20-2004 04:40 PM |
That's really funny, Dork. I liked it.
Kudos.
::coughcough::
Remember Norman and Laura?
| Darkside |
03-20-2004 05:08 PM |
I take it you saw that episode of Ms. Swan on MadTv too?
