[Fan Fiction] ACT 31: THE UNDERGROUND ERROR. Complete!

(hails) Well done! I'm loving this more and more every time you write another act. You're keeping the characters true to themselves and your plot has me very intrigued. And Dori is steadily growing on me. )

Well done, well done!

I always try to match up the big o music to the scenes that i'm reading, it makes it all the more real

I wish that you'd submit all of season 3 to the creators of Big O, i'm sure they'd like it

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Originally posted by Tifaria Ah, so Angel was acquainted with human Dorothy Wayneright! Nifty. I'm not completely sure where you're going with this, but I like it. I want to know more about Dorothy's 'premonition' regarding Angel, but I'm sure that will be revealed when the time is right. I like that Roger didn't show up in this episode for a while, but it functioned just fine without him. ) Can't blame Beck for not wanting to hear Dorothy shriek. It IS kind of harsh on the ears.

Upon hearing Dorothy shriek, Beck recieved a new lost memory fragment. It is called "A case of the willies." )

It's like Season 3 with 100% extra fluff!

I liked how you talked about Angel the Director as I was wondering what the deal was with all of that. Eagerly awaiting Act 32!

Well done as always, ACT! Looking forward to Act 32.

Finally! I had the time to sit down and read this through (the flu is going through the house, we have two kids down and the third is starting to cough )

I enjoyed it very much as always. I look forward to next week

Ah, great story. I just finished going through all of your Acts, 27-31. They all rock. However, I think there are small things you should know.

I see that during the megadeus battles, you have Roger and Beck calling out attacks as they perform them.

Well, we do see Beck doing this at one point. But since when does Roger yell out an attack as he sets it in motion? In fact, the closest thing to it was "if I use my chromebuster now i'll-".

Really, that's the only thing I see wrong. Apart from that, I enjoy your storiers very much, and am excited to read the next one when it comes out.

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Originally posted by NVWC2006 Ah, great story. I just finished going through all of your Acts, 27-31. They all rock. However, I think there are small things you should know. I see that during the megadeus battles, you have Roger and Beck calling out attacks as they perform them. Well, we do see Beck doing this at one point. But since when does Roger yell out an attack as he sets it in motion?

He's doing it to make sure Dorothy knows what he has in mind. (In fact, I really should have told the reader that! Say, in Act 28. Hang on a minute ... okay, it's fixed.)

(I still need to go back and stop using "chromebuster" when I mean "eye lasers" in acts 27-29, as another Alert Reader pointed out. Also, the elevator doesn't really go up to the penthouse, apparently, but stops on the eighth floor. I need to fix that, too, in a couple of episodes.)

Hahha I lvoe the title on this one ACT! ^_^"" Excellent Job! I promise to stay out of kitchen since its Norman's Domain! Lol! Excellent writtings! ^_^"""