[Fan Fiction] Mary Sue Stories

Well, I want to thank Crystalline for the excellent sketch or Tony being rescued by R. Dorothy. This is from a scene in Part I of "A Stroll with Dorothy".

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Cool stuff, Tony. (So I'm late on the response. My mind and body were elsewhere; so sue me!)

Pygmalion

Hah, a Mary Sue thread. Well . . .since I'm bored, I'll try one-Baroness style. (in play format)

(Roger is in Big O with Dorothy when all of a sudden a strange Megadeus with a giant clock on its chest appears out of nowhere.)
Roger: What the crappity?!
(The Megadeus continues walking towards Big O and collides with Big O. Roger goes unconsicous as a brilliant light shines all around. A few hours later, Roger wakes up and is lying in lush green grass.)
Roger: My head . . .
(Dorothy is lying next to him.)
Roger: Dorothy? Where did Big O go?
(Dorothy sits up.)
Dorothy: Roger, where are the domes?
Roger: What are you- (Roger looks up and sees there are no domes.) You're right. Where the hell are we?
(A bunch of flying things pass overhead with little bulby things falling from them. The bulby things hit the ground and explode.)
Roger: ???
(A weird-looking car pulls up. The window rolls down to reveal a girl with shoulder-length black hair in a blue off-the-shoulder sweater.)
Girl: What are you doing outside in an air raid?
Roger: Air raid? What the hell?
Girl: Where have you been? Germany's been bombed round the clock since the end of 1943.
Roger: WHAT? Germany? 1943? (Roger blinks in realization) That megadeus with the clock on it! I'm in the past!
Girl: You should come with me. Hop in.
(As they drive down the road)
Girl: Well, you're a new face. Who are you?
Roger: I'm Roger Smith. And you are?
Girl: Baroness Yoruame von Richthofen. Nice to meet you.
(They pull up to a large mansion. The ground shakes from the bulby things.)
Roger: What are those?
Yoruame: They're bombs, hon. The British have bombed us since the end of 1943. We're losing the war and it's all Hitler's fault.
Roger: May I ask you, where are we?
Yoruame: We're in Schweidnitz, Germany.
(In the mansion, Yoruame sets a shot of bourbon down in front of Roger)
Yoruame: So, you're from the future and have no memories of the past.
Roger: That's right.
Yoruame: I see.
(A blonde man walks downstairs in an outdated uniform with a Pour Le Merite at his throat.)
Yoruame: Oh Manfred, good of you to join us.
Roger: ?
Dorothy: He's transparent.
Manfred: I'm dead. I'm not supposed to be solid.

What other things will Roger and Dorothy find out about Yoruame and Manfred? Find out next time.

Sorry I was bored.

That's a tack I haven't seen since "Visit to a Weird Planet" dumped the crew of the Enterprise at a Star Trek con. I hope you will continue the story. I wanna see Roger in a Tiger tank.

Pygmalion

Woo, that's fun, mon Baroness! Especially trying to imagine Roger saying 'What the crappity?' *cracks up* Maybe if he had a head injury ... ^_^ Love the appearance by the Red Baron, too.

YoruameBaroness , this is an interesting twist to the Big O. I liked it.

Kudos.

Yoruame: Manfred, I want you to meet our friends, Herr Roger Smith and Frau Dorothy Wayneright. Roger, Dorothy, this is my husband, Manfred.
(Manfred shakes Roger's hand and kisses Dorothy's hand.)
Manfred: The pleasure is all mine.
Roger: So, you're dead?
Manfred: That's right, Herr Smith. I died in 1918. I was shot.
Roger: So why are you still in the world of the living?
Yoruame: Because of me.
Roger: Hmm?
Yoruame: Manfred didn't want me to be lonely, so he came back to the world of the living so that we could live together, like we would have done after the war had he not been shot.
Roger: What war? Aren't you in a war now?
Manfred: Where have you been all this time, Herr Smith? Under a rock or something?
Yoruame: Don't say that, Manfred. Roger and Dorothy are from the future. They don't know what's going on right now and they don't have any memories of the past. It's not their fault. (to Roger) Well, dear, here we go with a long yarn for you, and we'll try to explain the past ten or twenty years to you, so you'll understand what's going on now . . .
(Yoruame and Manfred explain everything to Roger and Dorothy. When they are done, Yoruame goes and gets her radio.)
Yoruame: It's too quiet in here. (she turns on the radio)
Hitler on the radio: It is this day, the 30th of August . . .
Yoruame: Oh, damn, nobody gives a damn! (fiddles with the dials until she tunes into Beethoven music)
Announcer: We interrupt this program with a special message from the Führer . . .
Yoruame: Nobody gives a damn! (she turns the radio off)
Dorothy: So this man, this Adolf Hitler, he's the reason why the world is at war.
Yoruame: Yes.
Dorothy: Why can't you get another leader?
Manfred: If only it were that easy . . .
Yoruame: That's the reason why he has the Schutzstaffel: so he can stay in power.
Roger: The who?
(Yoruame hands Roger a letter.)
Roger: I can't read this.
Yoruame: I know, but you can see those two lightning bolts, can't you?
Roger: Yes.
Yoruame: That's the symbol of the SS. That letter is from SS Reichsführer Heinrich Himmler.
Manfred: That stupid asshole. >_<
Yoruame: Tell me Roger, did you see any men in black when you arrived here?
Roger: No.
Yoruame: Any men you see in black with red armbands are soldiers in the SS. They are supposed to be Hitler's personal bodyguard . . .but they do so much more than that. And the ones in brown are the Sturmabteilung, or the SA. Then there's the Gestapo . . .
Roger: Basically, your country is being run by maniacs.
Manfred: Herr Smith, you hit the nail right on the head.
(The all-clear sounds.)
Yoruame: Bah, they'll be back in an hour with more bombs.
(Yoruame's maid enters the room.)
Maid: Baroness Richthofen, I have today's mail for you: a letter from the Reichsführer-SS.
Yoruame: Please burn it, dear.
Maid: Yes, ma'am. (she exits)
Roger: I take it this Reichsführer guy is someone you dislike.
Yoruame: I hate him with the whole of my being. He wants me to be his mistress. That's why he keeps sending me love letters.
Manfred: Bah, he just wants your money. The result of aristocracy.
Dorothy: But he is married, so you indicate.
Yoruame: He IS married. He and that damn Goebbels are horrible husbands; I'm surprised Frau Goebbels hasn't divorced him. (pause) I guess I better get dinner started . . .
(A few hours later, Yoruame finds Roger on the second floor balcony watching as the British bomb Berlin in the distance.)
Yoruame: You know you're not supposed to be outside, right?
Roger: Tell me something, Yoruame.
Yoruame: Yes?
Roger: You're of the aristocratic class, right?
Yoruame: Yes.
Roger: And apparently your name has some fame to it, right?
Yoruame: Yes . . .I assume you want an explanation.
Roger: That would be nice . . .
Yoruame: During the first war I told you about, Manfred was a courageous flying ace. In fact, that's how he died: in pursuit of a Canadian. His plane was painted all-red at his request, so he became known as the Red Baron. I was his wife, so when he died, I inherited his fortune. That's also why the people have a liking to me. (pause) You know, I wish you had come to Germany earlier . . .it hurts me for you to see the Fatherland like this . . .
(Roger turns and to his surprise, Yoruame is crying.)
Roger: Oh, don't cry, it's not your fault. (To her surprise, Roger reaches out and wipes away Yoruame's tears.)
Yoruame: Germany is normally a beautiful country. . .but now it's war-torn. Maybe tomorrow we can go out and I can show you some of the historic sites.

(Yoruame leads Roger and Dorothy to a guest bedroom. Roger swings open the door to reveal one bed.)
Roger: And where is she going to sleep?
Yoruame: Why, with . . .(pause) Oh, I thought you two were lovers, I apologize!
Roger: That's preposturous!
Yoruame(whispering to Dorothy): How can you let him deny you like that?
Dorothy: It's all right. I'm used to it.
Yoruame: Anyway, you can have that room, Roger. Dorothy, there's another room for you down the hall.
(Once she has made sure Roger and Dorothy are comfortable, Yoruame goes into the master bedroom and gets ready for bed. Manfred appears on his side of their bed.)
Manfred: Do you really think Herr Smith and Frau Wayneright are lovers?
Yoruame: Of course I do. Roger may not be open about it, but it's so obvious that he cares. (she turns off the light) Good night, dear.
(The next morning Yoruame is awakened by the air raid sirens.)
Yoruame(mumbling): You'd think by now I'd be used to this . . .(she sits up and looks at the clock) Well, it's time to get up anyway. (She looks at a lump under the covers next to her) Get up Manfred. (she pokes the lump)
Lump: Nnnggghhh . . .
(Yoruame produces a bell and rings it near the lump.)
Yoruame: Get up!
(Manfred pops up wide awake)
Manfred: I'm awake, I'm awake!
Yoruame: Go wake up Roger, will you? I'll start breakfast and wake Dorothy.
(Manfred takes Yoruame's bell to wake Roger up with. When Manfred walks in, Roger is lying across the floor with the blanket wrapped around him.)
Manfred: O_o Herr Smith, please wake up. (rings the bell)
Roger: DOROTHY!!!! (blinks and looks at Manfred) Um . . . oh, it's you . . .
Manfred: The shower is down the hall, on your left. I don't think I will ask you what you were doing in the middle of the floor.
Roger: Thank you.
(About thirty minutes later, everyone is eating a rather poor breakfast of bacon and pancakes.)
Yoruame: That's the last of my meat rations. I figured I had a good use for it.
Roger: That's very nice of you.
Manfred: Why don't I get any meat?
Yoruame: You idiot, you're dead! What need have you for food?
Manfred: I can still taste . . .
(Yoruame rolls her eyes and starts to say something, but is interruppted by the sound of marching boots)
Roger: What the hell?
(Roger and Dorothy look perplexed, but Yoruame and Manfred know the sound all too well)
Yoruame: Manfred, get my gun.
(Manfred disappears and reappears a few minutes later with a pistol. Yoruame and Manfred go over to the front window of the house and look out. Roger and Dorothy walk up behind them.)
Yoruame: Tell me when you see the Führer's car.
(The SS soldiers march by with their arms out in the Hitler salute. A car rolls by with Himmler in it followed by more soldiers.)
Manfred: Okay, here comes Hitler's car . . .
(Hitler's open car rolls by. He is standing and waving to the people.)
Manfred: Okay, get ready. . .fire!
Yoruame: This is for the Jews! (she aims carefully and pulls the trigger. The glass shatters and a small bloody hole appears in the middle of Hitler's chest)
Manfred(to Roger and Dorothy): RUN!
(Hitler screams and clutches his chest. Several SS men break ranks and rush to Hitler, as more run over to the mansion)
(Roger, Dorothy, and Yoruame run out the back of the house just as the SS storm the front)
Roger: That was that Hitler guy, wasn't it?
(Yoruame nods as Manfred appears next to her in his Fokker triplane, which is also see through)
Yoruame: Don't worry about me, but get Roger and Dorothy out of here!
(Manfred's eyes glisten with tears)
Yoruame: Yes, I realize what will happen to me. But make sure Roger and Dorothy don't get caught up in this. This isn't their concern.
Manfred: . . .okay. (to Roger and Dorothy) Hop aboard the Baron Express!
(They climb in Manfred's triplane and fly away just as the SS barge into the backyard.)
Himmler: Baroness Richthofen?!
Yoruame: Hmmph. If it isn't Heinrich Himmler.
Himmler: That bullet came from your home, so someone in your home killed the Führer.
Yoruame: I did.
(All the soldiers look at her in shock.)
Himmler: Have you gone mad?
Yoruame: No. I did what was right and just and honorable.
Himmler: You realize what this means, don't you?
Yoruame: Aren't you going to at least give me a fair trial?
Himmler: Hmmph, I might as well. It's a shame to have to kill such beauty. (to his men) Arrest her.
(Two of the SS men grab Yoruame roughly and haul her away)
(From above, Roger and Dorothy watch)
Roger: Um, Baron von Richthofen, may I ask what is going to happen to her?
Manfred (in a sad voice): More than likely they will execute her.
Roger: WHAT?!

Will Yoruame be executed? Can Roger, Manfred, and Dorothy save her?

Find out next time!

** Standing in a Red Army Uniform **

** speaking in a Russian Accent **

You have done an excellent job, commrad. The people of your beloved fatherland and of the Soviet Union owe a debt of graditude.

** Presenting her with a medium sized jewlrey box. **

We bestow upon you the Order of Lenin for your heroism and your nice story. Any story that has Hitler shot and Dorothy in it is great to me. Kudos.

Expect a visit from us in a couple of months. I suspect Stalin will have another purge soon and he is quite jealous of your heroic acts of bravery.

Trotsky and Alex Rosewatter are standing in front of Big Fau

Trotsky- wow i bet hat could even defeat big o

Alex- Yes, and using it's power i shall bring forth a new order to this world. i shall gather all memory's and distroy this world to bring apon a new age for us all

Trotsky- What?

Alex- i shall creat the world a New. it will have me as it's ruler. then i shall make it into my image!

Trotsky- waite, so your tellin me, i killed all those super hero guy's. Thorted jame's bond. stole indy's hat, then shot him. and turnd back the muiltary, just so that you can take this big tin robot and do some kind of meglao maniack day dream? in witch you probley will have the ablilaty to defeat this supusied, and probley the good guy. then you will probley not take your chance, and you will lose? so why did i help you?

Alex- because i'm paying you a lot of money. now hear's you large sack with a doller sign on it full of money. now leave me to my destany.

Trotsky- shure what ever captain weird-o... *he see's dorothy standing with out her memory leaning on the wall.* hay mind if i take this, it would be fun to tinker with.

Alex- I have no futhure need for it... *he's thinking* Pervert...

Trotsky put's Dorothy standing on a building facing north.

Trotsky- ah now all i have to do is get your boss's attention and then he can show that over pompus wind bag that his overly developed big words... just kick his ass ok?

Good going, Trotsky! Make sure Roger has an extra-special reason to kick Alex's fat can! (You war profiteer, you. )

Don't leave us hanging! We demand a conclusion!

Pygmalion

I started this last night, but then just as I was going to post it, my computer froze so I had to restart it.
Anyway, without further ado, when we last left off, our favorite Baroness had been arrested by the SS for killing Adolf Hitler, the Führer of Germany.
(Yoruame finds herself handcuffed to a lovely polished oak chair at a polished oak table with a lush dinner in front of her, consisting of fried chicken, mashed potatoes, green beans, corn, rice, and a glass of wine, with cheesecake for dessert. Yoruame blinks in horror as her mouth waters.)
Yoruame: Goodness, I haven't laid eyes on a meal like this since 1940!
Voice: There's more where that came from.
Yoruame: Who's there?
(Reichsführer-SS Heinrich Himmler enters and seats himself across the table from Yoruame, where another lavish dinner for him sits.)
Himmler: Ah, Baroness, so good of you to join me for dinner. It's really too bad that I had to handcuff you to the chair.
Yoruame: How in blazes do you expect me to eat with my hands bound behind my back? At least uncuff one hand so I can feed myself!
Himmler: Meh. I guess that can be arranged. (loudly) Goering!
(Yoruame blinks in shock as Hermann Goering walks in and uncuffs her right hand. He lifts her hand and starts to kiss it but she snatches her hand away.)
Yoruame: Keep your filthy fish lips to yourself!
Goering: Well gee, you're welcome, Baroness. (exits)
Himmler: You know, you could have a meal like this one every day.
Yoruame(setting her fork down): I know what this is. You're that desperate, aren't you?
Himmler: I can't help that I am mesmerized by your beauty.
Yoruame: Then gouge your eyes out. I would rather die than be your mistress.
Himmler: You do realize that under Hitler, I was the most powerful man in Germany, and with Hitler dead, your fate is up to me and me alone?
Yoruame: In other words . . .
Himmler: If you won't become my mistress then I'll have no choice but to have you hanged.
Yoruame: On the contrary, you do have a choice. Honestly, Reichsführer-
Himmler: Please, call me Heinrich.
Yoruame: Heinrich, what in the HELL makes you think I would WANT to be your mistress! My husband was the Red Baron! You're nothing compared to him!
Himmler: Dammit, I have more power than he could ever dream of having!
Yoruame: Dammit, it's not ALL ABOUT POWER! What about love? Happiness? Did those things ever cross your power-hungry little mind?! Either way, nothing you say can change my mind.
Himmler: Now now, dear Baroness, it's not good to make decisions in the spur of the moment.
Yoruame: I'll excuse myself now, if you don't mind.
Himmler: Very well. (loudly) Please come escort Baroness von Richthofen to her room.
(Two SS men come in and uncuff her from the chair and roughly haul her down the hall. They toss her into a bedroom, close the door, and lock it.)
Yoruame(yelling through the door): You could be a little more gentle! I AM a lady!
(She looks around her bedroom. There is a large bed with a lush purple velvet comforter and maroon pillows, a polished oak nightstand, a small desk with a small lamp on it, and a window with sheer purple curtains.)
Yoruame: Hah. Stupid Himmler gave me a way out.
(She goes over to the window and attempts to open it, only to discover that the window is sealed shut.)
Yoruame: Damn, damn, damn!!!!
(Meanwhile, Manfred, Roger and Dorothy arrive back at the Richthofen mansion. The interior is a complete mess from where the SS stormed the home. Manfred walks in slowly, head hung and shoulders slooping. Roger follows him and stops to carefully pick up broken glass from photographs that were on the mantle. Roger picks up a photo of Yoruame and Manfred together and looks at it momentarily. Manfred walks over to Yoruame's black baby grand piano and sits down at the bench. Dorothy watches the two mens' actions quietly.)
Manfred: Dammit it shouldn't have to END this way!!!!!! (he slams his fist on the polished ivory keys and the piano cries out)
Roger: I . . .I . . .(Roger blinks as he realizes something) Dorothy, can I have a word with you in the kitchen? (looks over as Manfred's shoulders begin heaving up and down, evident that he is crying softly) I think we should leave Baron von Richthofen alone for a moment.
(In the kitchen)
Roger: Dorothy, correct me if I'm wrong, but we WERE in Big O before we ended up here, right?
Dorothy: Yes. Why do you ask?
Roger: That means that Big O is somewhere in this time and place. But where . . .
Dorothy: Roger, what are you planning?
Roger(spotting Yoruame's car keys on the table): Never mind that. Let's go! (he grabs the keys and dashes for the door)
(The first few rays of sunlight stream into Yoruame's bedroom. Yoruame is seated on the bed with her hands limply in her lap. She has large black circles under her eyes, indicating she got no sleep the night before.)
Yoruame(parting the curtains): I suppose this is the last time I will ever see the sun rise. At least I can die knowing what I did was right.
(Three sharp knocks on her door interrupt her. She turns as Himmler walks in.)
Himmler: Did you change your mind?
Yoruame: I already told you. I'd rather die than sleep with you.
Himmler: Very well then. (to his men) Cuff her.
(Yoruame finds herself handcuffed and being led to the Reichsführer's car. The two SS men roughly shove her into the backseat and the car speeds away.)
(About thirty minutes later, the car pulls up to a lush green open field. In the middle of the field is a gallows. Several other cars pull up and SS men get out. A fancy car similar to Himmler's pulls up, and Hermann Goering and Joseph Goebbels get out.)
(Yoruame soon finds herself standing on the platform with a noose around her neck. She looks down at all the SS men gathered to watch her die.)
Himmler: You know, you can still change your mind.
(Yoruame hacks a loogie and spits it in Himmler's face. Himmler narrows his eyes angrily and slaps her hard across the face.)
Himmler: How dare you?!
Yoruame(anger flashing in her eyes): No, how dare YOU! Hitting a lady is very low-down and cowardly!
Himmler(to the crowd): This woman has dishonored our Reich and all that we hold dear and honorable and noble by killing our humble Führer. Something as horrible and deplorable as this will not be allowed to go unavenged. Now our beloved Reich is falling apart because of this woman's actions. And for that, she shall pay with her life! I, Reichsführer of the Schutzstaffel, Heinrich Himmler, sentence you, Baroness Yoruame von Richthofen, to DEATH!
Yoruame(thinking): Please let me die quickly . . .
(She feels the platform taken from beneath her feet, but instead of instant death she finds herself dangling . . .her eyes widen in realization.)
Yoruame: Can't you at least give me a quick death?
Himmler: Why would I when I can enjoy watching you slowly strangle to death?
Yoruame: You damn son of a bitch, you-(the noose tightens around her neck, cutting off her words. She struggles to breathe as the noose continues to slowly tighten. A strange sensation washes over her and a burning sensation begins in her throat.)
Himmler: Look and behold Germany's beloved Red Baroness now!
(The crowd begins to laugh at Yoruame)
Himmler: Mwahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!
(Yoruame blinks and feels tears on her cheeks)
Yoruame(thinking): Why am I hurt by that . . .? I shouldn't be surprised . . .I hope Manfred and Roger and Dorothy are okay, I hope the SS don't try to get Roger and Dorothy . . .(the noose tightens and Yoruame gives a slight gasp as she feels her eyeballs begin to pop out. Her ears are filled with Himmler's laughter as the burning sensation in her throat intensifies.)
(All of a sudden, the ground begins to shake)
Himmler: What's happening? What's going on?!
(Big O pops up through the field, sending SS men flying every which way. The ones who aren't in Big O's entrypath scream and run like madmen.)
Himmler: What the HELL? What the hell is that thing?!
Roger: Big O! IN ACTION!
(Big O's hand reaches down towards the gallows)
Himmler(in very high-pitched, womanly voice): Aaaaaiiiiieeee!!! It's a devil! (runs away)
(Big O carefully breaks the rope and Yoruame falls into Big O's open palm)
Roger: Damn, they sure are brutal!
(The SS produce a few antiaircraft guns and open fire on Big O)
Roger: You know, I really hate to do this but I have no choice.
(A lone red triplane flies in front of Big O)
Manfred: Leave them to me! (Manfred swerves around and easily avoids the antiaircraft guns. He swoops in low and opens fire on the men, who fall down where they are. He flies straight at Himmler, and Himmler's eyes widen, for he can see Manfred's ghost.)
Himmler: B-baron Manfred von Richthofen!!!
Manfred: Damn right! (he opens fire on Himmler and Himmler sinks first to his knees, then down onto his face. Blood begins pooling around him.)
(Roger gets out of Big O and carefully lifts Yoruame into his arms.)
Roger: Yoruame? (She is very cold and is sweating heavily. Roger blinks and notices that there are no pupils in her eyes and that her lips are slightly blue) Damn, she's going into shock!
(In a death defying move, Roger leaps down from Big O and somehow manages to land on his feet. Dorothy follows right behind him.)
Roger: Damn, damn, damn! (Yoruame begins shaking uncontrollably in his arms) Stay conscious, Yoruame! Stay with me!
(They hop into the nearest car, which happens to be Goebbels' car. Roger slams on the accelerator and Dorothy holds Yoruame.)
(Manfred appears in the backseat)
Manfred: Is she . . .?
Dorothy: She's not dead. She's still conscious but she's going into shock.
Manfred(to Roger): Let me drive. I know the nearest hospital.
(Manfred and Roger switch places. Dorothy and Roger sit in the back and lay Yoruame across their laps.)
Roger: Hang in there, Yoruame . . .
(Yoruame takes a deep breath and her eyelids flutter shut)
Roger(shaking her): YORUAME!!!

Manfred: What the hell happened?
Dorothy(holding Yoruame's wrist): She's not dead. She still has a pulse. She's just unconscious. (Dorothy removes the noose from Yoruame's throat, revealing the swollen, red skin.)
Manfred: This is why I prefer flying to driving! Cars have such poor horsepower! (Manfred slams on the accelerator)
Roger(mumbling): Got that right . . .
(They arrive at the hospital. Roger rushes in with Yoruame, followed by Dorothy and Manfred, which no one can see. At the desk is a slender lady with short blonde hair and intense blue eyes.)
Lady: Mag ich Ihnen, Sir helfen?
(Roger is slightly shocked)
Manfred(whispering in Roger's ear): Repeat after me: Der Baroness wurde fast getötet. Dann stieg sie in Schlag ein und ging unbewußt. Sie benötigt sofortig medizinische Behandlung, bitte.
Roger(in very poor German): Der Baroness wurde fast getötet. Dann stieg sie in Schlag ein und ging unbewußt. Sie benötigt sofortig medizinische Behandlung, bitte.
(The lady laughs)
Roger: What? This is no laughing matter!
Lady: Why didn't you just say you were a foreigner? I speak several languages, sweetheart. Your outfit screams "American". You're quite handsome, by the way. (She takes Yoruame into her own arms) My, she had a close scrape with death, didn't she? I'll see to it that she is tended to immediately. You just wait, the waiting room is down the hall on your left. (She disappears down the hall with Yoruame)

Can the doctors keep Yoruame from dying? Find out . . . next time!

You really know how to leave your readers eager for more.

Please.

Pygmalion

Great stuff, YoruameBaroness. I love it.

However, I do have one silly comment to make (I am chalked full of them). Why would Goering take orders from Himmler. He never did take that weasel serious, especially when he thought he was going to be the successor to Führer? Oh well, I think I am reading too much into the History books and not enough of a story that involved Dorothy.

Good job! Kudos.

Well seeing as I had the story take place in 1944, I just threw in a random Nazi, which I really shouldn't have done. If I'd let the story take place two years earlier, I could have put Heydrich in there, but since Heydrich was assassinated in '42, Goering was the next "best" choice . . .

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Originally posted by YoruameBaroness Well seeing as I had the story take place in 1944, I just threw in a random Nazi, which I really shouldn't have done. If I'd let the story take place two years earlier, I could have put Heydrich in there, but since Heydrich was assassinated in '42, Goering was the next "best" choice . . .

I was just being a P.I.T.A. It's a good story and I look forward to the next one.

(At Smith's Mansion, Roger puts on a tuxdeo and waiting for Giovannistruelove at Outback Steakhouse in Paradigm City. Giovannistruelove walking the sidewalk to see Roger.Giovannistruelove is wearing a black prom dress.)
Roger: I'm gald you came.
Giovannistruelove: Shall we?
Roger: OK.
(Roger and Giovannistruelove ride on Roger's Griffion. As they stop at Outback Steakhouse.)
Giovannistruelove: That's my favorite restauant.
Roger: It is?
(Giovannisturelove nods)
Waitess: How many guest we having?
Roger: Two. Heh, heh.
Waiter: This way, please.
(Roger and Giovannistruelove sits down at the table and picked for their order.)
Roger: This is your favorite food! Gold Coast Coconut Shrimp.
Giovannistruelove: (whispered) I LOVE IT!
Roger: (smiled) Humph.
Waiter: My name is Leela, and I will be your waitess for the day. What did get you a drink?
Roger: I'll have a Monet for Two --
Giovaanistruelove: ROGER!
Roger: Heh, heh, heh.
Giovannistruelove: I'll have sweet tea for two.
Leela: OK, Can I get you a appetiters?
Giovannistruelove: Well, If my mom says OK. I'll have a Coconut Shrimp.
Roger: *Gulps* The same as hers.
Leela: OK, They're going to be ready.

(To be Continued)

In a void a stolen spyplane slams at the speed of light
bursting thru all sorts of sound bariers

it and 6 others slam thru a gateway

guys on the ground useing cell phones are tuned in waiting for something

ATENTION CHEETA F SQUADREN

CHETA 1 : missles armmed

CHETA 2: READY FIRE ...FIRE....FIRE

CHETA 3: WHOH IM SPINNING

the 7 planes glide into the pre-event PC the ships generate a hudge wirlpool in the sky
it is during a war so there are spyplanes in the air
one was in the way......
ATENTION ALPHA THIS IS .......! MADAY! MAY...
the leading plane slamed threw the "heulet insat"
slashing her radar dish off
glideing therew time the planes are then createing sutch heat a megadues melts and 3 skyscrapers that are below have melted dips in them the planes then blast into modern PC where BIG O is fighting a duo the planes fire odd rays at the red megadues and it falls into a melting heap

the planes then slam therew the domes and land in the water

steping out of his plane "r.jesse" pulls out a luger and as the hatches of the planes open he shoots the pilots dead...

back in PHQ the CEO trys to calm the public to no avail

the UFO's take off agin this time 6 of them on auto pilot
and shoot down the PHQ tower's steeple

big O cathes them by suprise blasting allbut one whitch flys away to the west dome and sits there

LT: genaral dausten sir!

dausten : what?

LT: there is a spaceship on top of the west dome

dausten: i think this is not good



TO BE CONTINUED