[Fan Fiction] Mary Sue Stories

Dude, that was nice. It was cute and innocent. Keep it up.

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Originally posted by A Clockwork Tomato Okay, I’ve done a Mary Sue. Mary Sue’s are hard for me. I can’t bring myself to force anyone to break character, and I frankly don’t think that the main characters would let me muscle into any of the big-time action. So I ended up with a simple vignette, with no action or plot development to speak of. I hope you enjoy it!

That was really good! Thing is, it feels like an intro and I'm dying to know what happens next!

I know, I know. I'm greedy.

That's an interesting concept - newcomers losing their memories when they first arrive.

And the jokes are good - like my husband's. Only less puns.

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Originally posted by Zola That was really good! Thing is, it feels like an intro and I'm dying to know what happens next! I know, I know. I'm greedy.

Gee, whiz. People sure are nice on this forum!

If it goes any further I will need an actual plot, not just an incident. Haven't thought of one.

In a Mary Sue, we'd want a hideous crisis that emperils all the regular characters and leaves them helpless until the viewpoint character resolves the crisis through the creative application of his suddenly relevant and unique powers (which are fairly ordinary skills back home).

Even when you can rattle off the parameters of the plot, as I just did, it doesn't mean you can come up with one that's worth writing down!

The alternative, which is even harder, is to do a romance or farce (or romantic farce, as if you were P.G. Wodehouse). Here the plot itself is usually very thin, but the twists have to be good. Usually romance and comedy writers make life easy on themselves by using rather dim-witted characters, but the regulars in BIG O are pretty sharp.

I try to think but nothing happens!

>The alternative, which is even harder, is to do a romance or farce (or
>romantic farce, as if you were P.G. Wodehouse). Here the plot itself is
>usually very thin, but the twists have to be good. Usually romance and
>comedy writers make life easy on themselves by using rather dim-witted >characters, but the regulars in BIG O are pretty sharp.

Hey ...

*writer of such things*

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Originally posted by Lady Tesser Hey ... *writer of such things*

Present company excluded, of course.

I was thinking of P.G. Wodehouse, who usually had fairly dimwitted heroes because his kind of plot depended on the hero making one idiotic blunder after another. While you can do this sort of thing with smart heroes, it's really hard to come up with a good plot for them. It's a lot easier with dumb characters like Bertie Wooster.

But with fan fiction, the audience already knows all the main characters, so you can't change them to suit your plot. You have to come up with a plot that makes sense for Roger and Dorothy, who are both smart. So you have to come up with problems and plot twists that even smart, capable people can't extract themselves from except with great difficulty. That's hard.

Wooster and Jeeves, yeah!

Okay, you're forgiven. Although it's pretty fun to put them in dim-witted situations and illustrating the point that smart people think too much.

*to the back* Dorian, put the guitar down, he apologized.

Dorian Wayneright: Very well, Tess. By the way, why does not anyone from your boards visit Reciprocal Paradigm?

Give them a chance, hon, give them a chance. We're still working on act 3.

Thank you Zola for your incredible editing abilities.

The scene takes place at Paradigm Corporation Cafeteria.

Tony: ** With a lunch tray in his hands, Tony walks towards the tables. Zola and Luis are waiting for him with Falcon7.** Hi guys.
Falcon7: Hi Tony. Zola told me that you and Roberta-the-Robot were caught doing unmentionable acts in my car! What gives?
Zola: ** Sarcastic ** I bet you she got oil all over the seats.

**Zola and Luis are laughing, Falcon7 is furious. **

Tony: ** Apologetic. ** Nothing happened to your car. I'm getting it washed and waxed, as we speak. As for what went on in your car...

**There's an uneasy silence. **

Luis: ** Shocked. ** You didn't! Did you?
Zola: ** Sarcastic. ** Paradise by the Dashboard Light? Ewww...
Falcon7: ** Laughing. ** Do tell. All the details.
Tony: ** Smiling. ** Well, brace yourselves. **Sipping his drink. ** It was like this...

** Tony and Dorothy head back to the car. **

Tony: ** Holding the car keys in his hand. ** Hey Dorothy, have you ever driven a sports car before? You know how to drive, don't you?
Dorothy: ** Staring at the keys. ** I know how, but I haven't gotten much of a chance, unless you count steering a car with my foot while standing on the hood.
Tony: ** Walks over and hands her the keys. ** Here! It's an automatic, so you won't have to worry about shifting.
Dorothy: ** Showing a hint of a smile. ** Okay.

** Dorothy walks around to the driver's side and gets in. Without hesitation, she starts up the car. **

Tony: ** Knocking on the passenger side window. ** Unlock the door?
Dorothy: ** Apologetic, reaching over and hitting the button. ** Please excuse me, I'm a little excited.
Tony: ** Smiling. ** It's all right. It's your first time.
Dorothy: ** Shifting it into drive and accelerating rapidly. ** Where should we go now?
Tony: ** Smirking. ** It’s up to you. The next thing we need to do is... is…Well, it depends if you want to go on to the next step.
Dorothy: ** Without hesitation. ** I will go as far as I have to.
Tony: ** Trying to hide his nervousness. ** I know Colonel Dastun is on duty in the Central Dome, 3rd district. It's a long shot, but if he's there, we'll...
Dorothy: ** Interrupting. ** Have sex?
Tony: ** A little shocked ** No! Just making out will do. Hopefully he'lll see us and inform Roger.
Dorothy: ** Perplexed. ** Making out? You mean kissing?
Tony: ** Nodding. ** Yes, that's what I mean. Of course, this is only for show.
Dorothy: ** Unemotional. ** For Dastun to see, right?
Tony: Right. Stop right here. ** Pointing at an abandoned movie theatre. ** I have noticed that Dastun walks by and stares at this joint a lot. It's like he relives his childhood there or something like that.
Dorothy: ** Turns to face Tony. ** Yes, he dreams of this place a lot.
Tony: ** Trying to change the subject. ** Dreams, right. Remember what I told you, we are only acting.
Dorothy: ** Pointing ** There he is. ** Suddenly, she grabs Tony and starts kissing him. **
Tony: ** Patting her shoulder, trying to speak. ** I can't breathe. Dorothy, you... you... ** Giving up, he starts running his hands over her back. ** Never mind.

** There's the sound of a nightstick tapping the roof of the car. **

Dastun: ** Angry. ** Hey you two, get a room! Don't you know... ** Recognizing them ** Dorothy, is that you? ** Looking at Tony. ** Hey, you're not Roger! What's going on here!
Dorothy: ** Unemotionally staring ** Hi Dastun, I am on a hot date and as you can see, we are quite busy at the moment!
Tony: ** Proud, with red lipstick all over his face. ** That's right! So beat it, flat-foot!
Dastun: ** Angry ** You! Out of the car!
Tony: ** Whispering to Dorothy. ** Don't worry. I'll be fine.
Dastun: ** Grabbing Tony by the coat ** I should teach you something about respecting the law! ** Glancing at Dorothy. ** I am going to let you off with a warning since you’re a friend of hers.
Tony: ** Swallowing his pride. ** Thank you, sir.
Dastun: ** Looking at Dorothy. ** You should get back home, young lady. Roger is probably worried sick about you!
Tony: ** Trying to act tough. ** Well, she's with me. I'll take care of her.
Dastun: ** Sarcastic. ** Yeah, right. Beat it, buddy, or I'll give you a ticket for loitering.
Tony: ** Gazing into Dorothy's eyes. ** Come on, honey. He's right, why stay here when we could get a room? Thanks, Officer!

** Dorothy starts up the car and drives off. **

Dorothy: ** Staring at the road. ** How was that?
Tony: ** His heart still beating furiously. ** Dorothy, that was awesome. Where did you learn to kiss like that!
Dorothy: ** Glances at Tony, with a smile. ** I have my secrets.
Tony: ** Smiling. ** OK, we'll leave it at that. Hey, we should be getting you back home. It's already 4 am.
Dorothy: ** Perplexed. ** What for? I don't require sleep and Roger won't wake up for another 8 hours.
Tony: Dorothy, he's up! Believe me, he won't be able to sleep knowing that you are out with me. ** Joking. ** Especially after Dastun tells him about our dirty deeds.
Dorothy: ** Hint of a smile. ** You're enjoying this, aren't you?
Tony: ** Gives her a toothy grin. ** Dor-able, I live for this.

** Just before arriving at the Smith Mansion, Tony asks Dorothy to pull over. She does. **

Dorothy: ** Perplexed. ** OK, why did you want to stop? Did you forget something?
Tony: ** Surprised. ** No, we need some irrefutable evidence. You know what to do?
Dorothy: Oh, you mean what we discussed earlier. I am not sure if I should. I may hurt you.
Tony: ** Laughing. ** Don't worry, Dorothy. After all, I am unable to do it to you. Get on with it.
Dorothy: ** Hesitantly. ** OK, one hickey coming up!
Tony: ** She loosens his tie and undoes the top button of his collar and puts her lips to his neck. His eyes widen and he starts squirming around a little. ** Well, that's...Dorothy, that should be enough. Don't forget to get some lipstick on my collar.
Dorothy: Won't it stain?
Tony: ** Trying to laugh while nursing his bruised neck. ** You're so thoughtful. I couldn't care less about the shirt. **Shivering a little as she kisses his neck along his collar.** That's probably good en…
Dorothy: The lipstick has worn off your face ** Kisses him again. **
Tony: **Pulling away reluctantly** If we're going to be keeping this just for show, we'd better stop right here. ** Running his hands through her hair to make it a bit messier. Mumbling. ** And if things with Roger don't work, I am always available.
Dorothy: ** Looking at the bruise ** I hope that doesn't hurt you too much tomorrow. What did you say?
Tony: ** Quickly. ** Nothing. So…how about this car? Isn't it great?
Dorothy: ** Agreeing. ** Yes. I like it, but it’s not as fast or efficient as the Griffon.
Tony: ** Sarcastic. ** Geez, everybody's a critic. Okay, let me drive you home.

** Tony speeds towards the Smith Mansion. He then pulls the handbrake and spins the car in to a parking spot. **

Dorothy: ** Impressed. ** That was good. Roger tried it a few times, but he always ends up on the sidewalk.
Tony: ** Proud ** Well, I have been practicing. ** Suddenly becoming nervous. ** I hope that Falcon7 doesn't hear about this.

**Cut back to the cafeteria. **

Falcon7: Man, I asked you not to wreck it!
Tony: No, I didn't. I promise, if there is anything close to resembling a scratch...
Zola: ** Interrupting. ** Shh, Falcon! It's getting good. **Sarcastically ** Tell me, does she taste like Mobile One or Cooking Oil!
Luis: ** Coughing out soda. ** Man, it came out of my nose!
Tony: ** Trying to calm them. ** Guys, Focus! As I was saying'

** Cut back to the front door of the Smith Mansion. **

Tony: ** Opening the passenger door. ** Mademoiselle.
Dorothy: ** With a warm smile. ** Thank you, Tony. You are such a gentleman.
Tony: ** Kissing her neck, whispering. ** Is he watching?
Dorothy: ** Loudly. ** Yes... Yes... Yes...
Tony: Good, let go inside

** Dorothy opens the front door and Tony follows her in. Roger is standing there waiting. **

Dorothy: ** Ignoring Roger. ** Well, here we are.
Roger: Dorothy.
Tony: ** Also ignoring Roger. ** Yes, we are. I had a wonderful time. ** Starting to kiss Dorothy goodnight. **
Roger: Dorothy! What the hell are you doing?
Dorothy: Roger Smith, you will never cease being a louse. Tony was only seeing me to my room.
Roger: ** Noticing the hickey. ** I'm sure he's very interested in your safety.
Tony: **Smiling. ** What's wrong with that? If I didn't know better, I'd think you were jealous or something.
Dorothy: ** Stepping between the two men. ** Roger, you have no right to interfere. Didn't you once say that I should be myself? ** Looking at Tony. ** Call me.
Tony: ** Looking at Roger. ** Sorry we were so late, we were having so much fun we completely lost track of time. ** Holds out his hand. ** I take good care of her, really. Friends?
Roger: ** Ignoring Tony. ** I have a busy day tomorrow, I just wanted to make sure you got back in one piece. Good night. ** He starts walking away. **
Dorothy: **Lays another kiss on Tony. ** Thanks for a wonderful evening.
Tony: **Smirking at the irritated expression on Roger's face. ** I'll see you tomorrow **He leaves**

**Cut back to the cafeteria.**

Tony: ** Being sincere. ** That's it for now.
Zola: ** Intrigued. ** Wow Tony, I didn't think you had it in you.
Falcon7: All right! Well, if you need to borrow my car again, you got it.
Zola: Back to work! Later, Cupid. ** Falcon 7 and Zola walk away **
Tony: ** Turning to Luis. ** So, what did you think?
Luis: ** Patting Tony on the shoulder. ** You need professional help, buddy. But I like your style. ** Turns to his watch. ** Lunch is over, we better get going.
Tony: **Chuckles. ** Ah, you go right ahead. I need some time to think.

Woo-hoo!!!!

Go Tony! Get Roger all riled up! That's the way to do it!

(And you get some incidental make-out time with Dora, too, sly dog.)

Can't wait for the next chapter. ^_^

Gosh, tvperez, I take back what I said about the UNIX poster -- Tony's a real tiger!

Pygmalion

Thank you Zola for your incredible editing abilities and ideas.

Part I

The scene takes place at Paradigm-City AI Software Engineering Department.


Tony: ** Walking into his cubicle with his usual wave for his coworkers. He is not wearing his usual smile, but is seems lost in thought and very tired. **
Luis: Hi Tony. What's up? What happened to your perky disposition?
Zola: ** Head emerging from her cubicle. ** You actually look like there is something bothering you. What happened, did Robo-Babe kick you out of bed?
** Luis and Zola both start laughing. They notice that Tony isn't paying any attention at all. **
Zola: ** Perplexed. ** What's wrong?
Luis: Yeah, what's up? I haven't seen you this deep in thought since you were working on the STP project.
Tony: ** Looking at Luis and Zola. ** Guys, I am facing a moral dilemma.
You see, last night Dorothy and I went on another date. Well, while we were out…

** Cut to Roger's study room. He is at his desk reviewing some documents for a case. **

Roger: ** Unable to concentrate, pressing the intercom button. ** Norman, is Dorothy here?
Norman: ** Yes, sir. She has just arrived from the market. Shall I summon her?
Roger: Yes, Norman.
** A few moments later. **
Dorothy: ** Knocking on the door. **
Roger: ** Pretending to be concentrating on the documents. ** Come in.
Dorothy: ** Calmly. ** Did you call for me?
Roger: Yes, please sit down.
Dorothy: I would rather stand.
Roger: ** Annoyed. ** Suit yourself. I wanted to ask you what your plans were for this evening.
Dorothy: Roger Smith, is your memory failing you? Norman told you that my friend was coming over tonight.
Roger: ** Pretending not to know. ** Really, which friend? Is it Instro?
Dorothy: ** Actually rolling her eyes** It is not Instro. Tony will be stopping by for dinner.
Roger: ** Unable to hide his annoyance. ** R. Dorothy Wayneright, I don't believe that you should be associating with that shady character. What do you know about him, anyways?
Dorothy: Well, I know that he makes me happy. Besides, why should I tell you anything about my affairs? Do you not yourself associate with Angel? Is she not a shady character?
Roger: ** Standing up. ** Well, then. If that is the way it's going to be… ** Thinking about it. ** Fine, he may stop by for dinner. Now, I need to attend to my work.
Dorothy: Thank you, Roger. ** She leaves the room. **
Roger: ** Opens his desk drawer and takes out a picture of Dorothy. After a looking at it for a long moment, he places it back in the drawer. **

** Later on that evening, in front of the Smith Mansion. Tony, dressed in a simple black suit with a black tie, is buzzing the intercom **


Norman: Yes, may I help you?
Tony: *Nervously* Hello, Norman. It’s Tony.
Norman: Come right in. ** A buzzing noise can be heard and Tony opens the door.**
Tony: **Walking into the entryway and waiting until Norman joins him.** Thank you, Norman.
Norman: I see that you are dressed to code.
Tony: ** Smiling. ** Yeah, Dorothy told me about it. Is Roger in a perpetual state of mourning?
Norman: ** Chuckling. ** No, sir. I don't believe that is the case.

**Norman leads him to the main room. **

Norman: Dorothy will meet with you shortly.
Tony: ** Feeling a little intimidated ** Thank you, Norman.
Roger: ** From the balcony. ** I see that you have observed the dress codes.
Tony: ** Nervous. ** Yes, Dorothy told me that you were fanatical about the color black.
Roger: ** Slamming his drink on the railing. ** Is that what she told you?
Tony: ** Looking at the skyline, making it a point not to stare at Roger. ** In so many words.
Roger: What are your intentions concerning... ** He breaks off when Dorothy comes in. **
Dorothy: ** Dressed in a forest green dress with spaghetti string shoulder straps, and matching shoes. ** Hello, Tony. You look good.
Tony: ** Stunned. ** Dorothy, if only I had words to describe how beautiful you look.
Roger: ** Annoyed. ** I believe that breaks the dress codes of the house.
Dorothy: How about when Angel stops by? She doesn't wear black. I never hear you complain about her clothing choices, especially when she’s wearing those low-cut shirts that make you think she’s going to fall out of...
Roger: **Interrupting hastily** Dorothy, this is neither the time nor place.
Tony: ** Changing the subject and offering his arm. ** Shall we, my lady?
Dorothy: ** Taking Tony’s arm with a smile. ** Yes, of course.
Roger: ** Annoyed and alone. ** Dorothy, the dress code is very important to me!

** Norman steps out on the balcony. **

Norman: Dinner is served, Master Roger.
Roger: ** Storming inside. ** The sooner this is over, the better.

**Cut back to the office. **

Zola: ** Puzzled. ** So what the hell is the problem?
Luis: Yeah, sounds like you got him all riled up.
Tony: Guys that is not even the half of it.

** Cut to dining room. **

Roger: ** Staring at Tony. ** So Tony, tell me what you do for a living.
Tony: ** Trying to gulp down his food. ** Excuse me. I don't like to talk
when my mouth is full.
Dorothy: Roger, what seems to be the problem? If I interrogated your guests in that tone of voice, you would be very angry with me. Don't be such a…
Roger: ** Interrupting sarcastically. ** Yes, I know. Don't be such a louse. Well, I'd like to know something about this man you are dating. ** Speaking in his smoothest Negotiator manner ** So, Tony, what do you do for a living?
Tony: ** Proudly. ** I am an AIT Software Developer for Paradigm Corporation.
Roger: ** Surly. ** So, you punch keys all day. Fascinating.
Dorothy: Well, I like what he does. ** Staring at Tony. ** In fact, do you mind if I fix your lunch tomorrow?
Roger: ** Annoyed. ** Wait a minute! I believe that Norman may need your help with...
Norman: ** Standing behind Roger. ** Oh, I don't have anything specific planned for Dorothy.
Dorothy: ** Staring. ** Roger, if I want to bring Tony lunch, I will do so. Just because I work for you doesn't mean I'm on call twenty-four hours a day. I get to take a lunch break.
Roger: ** Angry. ** A lunch break? You don’t need a lunch break, you’re an android... ** Stopping himself. ** Sorry, I didn't mean that.
Dorothy: ** Frowning. ** Norman, thank you for dinner. ** She gets up and brings her plate to the kitchen **
Tony: ** Following her. ** Honey, don't listen to... ** Stopping to stare
at Roger and shaking his head. ** I hope you are satisfied. ** Walks out of the dining room. **
Norman: ** Masking his sarcasm. ** I believe tonight was a success.
Roger: ** Sighs heavily ** Norman, I don't know what got into me.
Norman: If I might be so bold, sir, you can't blame her for wanting a life of her own. You've certainly never consulted her about your activities.
Roger: Why do I get the feeling I've just been slapped by everyone in the house?

Part II

**Cut back to the office. **

Zola: ** Puzzled. ** Geez, he is such a jerk.
Luis: Yeah, how can she put up with him?
Tony: You know how love is. Anyways ...

** Cut to Dorothy's Room. **
Tony: ** Knocks on the door. ** Hey Dorothy, can I come in?
Dorothy: Enter.
Tony: ** Smiling. ** Looks like we got him where you want him. ** Noticing tears of some kind streaming from her eyes. ** Hey Dorothy, don't cry.
Dorothy: ** Trying to pretend she isn't. ** I am not crying. **
Tony: He didn't mean it, really. I could tell he felt really badly for saying that.
Dorothy: He should be speaking for himself; you shouldn't have to do it for him.
Tony: ** Giving Dorothy a hug. ** He’s getting there, I'm sure of it.
Dorothy: ** Smiling warmly. ** Do you think so?
Tony: I know so.

** A few moments later. **


Roger: ** Knocks on the door. ** Dorothy, may I come in?
Dorothy: Are you going to insult me in front of my guest again?
Roger: ** Sounding embarrassed. ** No, I'll be a gentleman.
Dorothy: That isn't necessary, being pleasant will be adequate.
Roger: ** Sarcastically. ** You're hurting me, really. ** After a moment of silence ** Okay, I'll make nice.
Dorothy: Enter.
Roger: ** Sees Tony, dressed in pajamas, lying on the bed. Dorothy is wearing a beautiful nightgown, again in green. Surprised, he lowers his head. ** I see. Maybe I should stop by later.
Dorothy: No, please say what you have to say.
Roger: ** Nervously. ** I just wanted you to know I had Norman fix a guest room for Tony.
Dorothy: How thoughtful, for a change. But, Tony will be staying with me tonight.
Roger: ** Looking at her twin bed. ** I don't believe that both you and Tony would be comfortable there. Besides, don't you need your privacy?
Dorothy: No, but thank you for thinking of me.
Roger: Dorothy, be reasonable. Besides, it is inappropriate to...
Dorothy: This is my room and I can have any guest I want in it. If you have a problem with that, I can stay down Tony's place. Really, Roger! It’s rude of you to lecture me this way in front of company!
Roger: ** Shaking his head. ** But…but… ** Realizing he’s been beaten ** Fine, you win, Dorothy. Do what you want. ** He leaves the room. **
Tony: ** Nervously looking at the floor. ** Man, this is going to be the death of me.
Dorothy: Well, it is midnight. You must be sleepy.
Tony: ** Still not believing Roger gave up so easily. ** Yes, but you take the bed. ** Smiles. ** It's your room, after all.
Dorothy: ** Giggling. ** Tony, don't forget. I am an android, and I don't need to sleep. But, if you don't feel comfortable with my sleeping in the same bed as you, I can sit in that chair over there.
Tony: Dorothy, I cannot allow you to do that. Besides, we'll both fit. I'll take the left side and you can have the right. ** Climbs into the bed **
Dorothy: ** Also getting into the bed ** Shall I shut off the light?
Tony: OK. Thank you, Dorothy.
Dorothy: **Flips the switch ** Good night.
Tony: Good night, my lady.
Dorothy: ** After a moment of silence ** Tony?
Tony: **Sleepily** What is it, Dorothy?
Dorothy: Roger was really a louse tonight. Are you sure it’s just because he’s jealous?
Tony: Yeah, I think so. He doesn't act that way all the time, does he?
Dorothy: Not quite that badly.
Tony: ** Yawning ** Well, there you go. Don't worry, he'll come around.
Dorothy ** After another few minutes of silence ** What if he doesn't?
Tony: ** Half asleep ** Huh? What?
Dorothy: What if he doesn't come around?
Tony: ** More awake sounding ** Are you crying again? ** Touching her face ** Aw, come on, Dorothy. It will be fine. ** Putting his arms around her and mumbling a little ** You'll still have me.
Dorothy: Do you really mean that?
Tony: ** Embarrassed ** Well, yeah, of course I do. I think you’re beautiful and a lot of fun to be around. ** Completely shocked when he realizes she’s undoing the buttons on his pajamas ** Dorothy? Dorothy? What are you doing? Doro… ** He can't say anything more because she’s kissing him **

**Cut back to the office. **

Zola: ** Genuinely surprised ** Wow! What did Roger say in the morning?
Luis: Yeah, did he kick your butt? Tony, I didn't think you had it in you!

**Zola and Luis are laughing again. **

Tony: Actually, I don't know what he said. I had to leave to go to work, and as far as I know, he was still sleeping. I just feel strange about the whole thing.
Luis: Why? Looks like you got him running scared now!
Zola: ** Shocked. ** You aren't falling for her, are you? You’re joking! ** She starts laughing again **
Luis: ** Noticing Tony is really serious ** Dude, you can't be. Look, my cousin knows this girl…
Tony: ** Interrupting. ** Don't worry about it, I can handle my own affairs.
Zola: ** Staring at Tony. ** You better be careful! If you fall for her and she goes off with him, you’re going to end up with a broken heart!
Tony: Don't worry guys. It's all good. ** Looking at his watch. ** Geez, look at the time. I got a meeting in 5 minutes. Later guys. ** Tony rushes out of his cubicle. **
Luis: Wow, we've got to do something about this. He’s really getting serious!
Zola: Nah, he’s a big boy, I'm sure he can handle this himself. ** Looking at Luis thoughtfully ** At least, I hope he can! Hey, did you get that email report?

That crashing sound you just heard was the sound of 797 jaws hitting the ground (the 27 non-R/D-shippers are looking smug). Oh, Tony, Tony, what have you done!

Pygmalion

Man, two in a twin bed is ... cramped!

** blushing **

Well, I like my audience riveted.



As for the twin bed, I didn't mind.

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Originally posted by tvperez As for the twin bed, I didn't mind.

Me either, but in my advancing years, I prefer something more... queenly.

Pygmalion

I am glad that you liked it. I will have another part by Friday or Saturday. Depends on how much energy I have left, after that night with Dorothy.



I know, that is wrong.

Woah.

Just ... woah.

Never expected ...

You're good.

Well, I guess that Roger is out of the window now...

Poor bastard, he should have caught up on Dorothy's hints sooner. If he did then he would have been in Tony's place instead. Oh well, I guess that we can say goodbye to R/D in your story. And yes, that comment that you just made was wrong.

Awesome. I can homnestly say that this is perhaps the most nuanced and interseting "mary Sue" story, I've ever seen. bravo!

Advinius, thank you for your kind words.

Zola and I have been working hard on these scenes. She is a great editor and has awesome ideas to spruce up each story.