[Other] 'Cakes Poetry and Short Story Corner

angelcakes 02-14-2005 04:33 PM
Little attempt at a poem...not that good, but I wanted to share ^_^

Lover's Requiem

She sang a lover's requiem,
A sweet serenade of pain,
A ballad of the bad times,
Of things she wishes she could've changed.

She sang a lover's requiem,
A last sorry to her heart,
For letting it be broken,
For tearing it apart.

She sang a lover's requiem,
She hoped that he could hear,
The pain he cast upon her,
Her hopes that he was near.

She sang a lover's requiem,
Each note louder than the next,
Not stopping for a breathe,
As if that she were hexed.

She sang a lover's requiem,
She did not wish to stop,
But if she did continue,
Her fragile heart could pop.

She sang a lover's requiem,
Even knowing this was true,
Repeating one last stanza,
'All of this, I sing for you.'

Edit: Since I've been on a poem high lately, I've decided to change the name of the thread to include all the poems my odd little mind makes up ^_^
Generalissimo D 02-14-2005 04:51 PM
That....was beautiful angelcakes...but it stirred up memories that I would rather have forgotten. Here is why:

I knew a woman who felt like that
She cared so much for her lover
He toyed with her and gave his heart to others...
With the excuse that she loved too loved another...
spoiler (highlight to read):
that woman....is my mother...
pen1300 02-14-2005 08:39 PM
That's really pretty. You should keep writing poetry because this little attempt is lovely! The first line repeating every stanza was a little much, but overall, the effect was great and I pictured some girl, holding her hands, dressed in flowing dress, and crying.

Nice job!

BethMcBeth 02-14-2005 08:55 PM
Wow! Angelcakes thats awsome! Its beautiful and strong too! ^_^"" Awsome work!
Dorothy and Roger 02-16-2005 05:00 PM
That was a beautiful poem. I liked it! Pleased
Lyinginbedmon 02-16-2005 05:02 PM
Truly wonderful!
Bllue 02-16-2005 07:08 PM
that was soooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo pretty!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
angelcakes 02-16-2005 09:01 PM
Lil free verse poem I wrote at the end of the day. No rythm or rhyme hate to say. Hope you like it.

I’ve tried to imagine life without him.
Each time I’ve ended up crying.
I can’t do it, he’s a part of me.

I remember the day we first met.
We didn’t care for each other that much.
That might be an understatement, but I guess I want to remember that day as a great moment.
That was when our paths crossed.

At first we weren’t close.
We weren’t friend.
We weren’t lovers.
We were simply comrades.
Allies in a game neither wished to play.

Allies become agreeable opposites.
Agreeable opposites became friends.
Friend became more than I thought it could be.

Then the tables all turned.
The game was different now, and I wanted to know the rules.
He set all the stages, he pulled up the curtain.
I was the one who walked onto the stage.

The ropes began to thin.
The days grew shorter.
He became colder.
But I didn't accept it.

He started it.
I must sound like a child.
I feel like one.
I'm scared and alone.
But I know he's never coming back.

He started it.
He ended it.
Generalissimo D 02-16-2005 09:12 PM
that sounds like it should be angels theme. Once again, beautiful
black dragoness 02-16-2005 09:46 PM
Excellent poems angelcakes. I've always liked these kind of sad-themed poems that stir emotion in the reader, and I think you've gotten your ideas across nicely. Smile
Dorothy and Roger 02-16-2005 10:10 PM
That was another awesome poem. Thumbs Up
pen1300 02-17-2005 10:27 AM
Oh wow! That cuts deep! Wonderful job!

angelcakes 02-17-2005 03:06 PM
*blush* Awww, thanks guy ^_^

Well, today I wrote two poems (I'll post the other one later) Again, it's free verse and sad (there's just so easy to write!) Enjoy.

Nothing More, Nothing Less.

I've cried enough,
I say that everyday,
But, do I really mean that?
Have I ever meant that?
I can't say yes truthfully.

To my friends I smile and laugh,
And many times find that smile to be true,
But not a day do my thoughts not wander to you.
You're like chocolate, I can't get enough.
You're too hard to give up.

I almost feel forsaken,
By my heart for being broken,
By my head for letting it break,
By you for breaking it,
By God for not listening.

You probably think that's stupid,
How could God turn his back on me,
He found a way to shut me out,
I think he gave up too.

I pray to him everyday,
Even knowing he stopped listening long ago,
Asking to suddenly forget you,
Or for you to be in my arms again.

But that can't happen,
You were never truely in my arms,
You were distant, you were cruel,
But I needed you to love me,
It didn't matter how you treated me.

I don't know if you ever cared,
I hope you did even if you stopped,
I still wish that you'd remember that feeling,
Re-live it and embrace it once again,
And things would be the same again.

But it will never happen,
Not even in my dreams does it happen,
My happiness has a limit.
My pain is unbounded,
Nothing more, nothing less.
Lyinginbedmon 02-17-2005 03:49 PM
Awwwww, that is so beautiful! It sounds like something R. Dorothy would write too!
Asirt 02-17-2005 05:50 PM
After reading your poems, angelcakes, I have to say that you did a great job with these. My favorite ones so far are Lover's Requiem and your most recent one (Nothing More, Nothing Less). Smile They are pretty deep in terms of feeling, and I also like your choice of words. Keep posting more of them. It's always nice and interesting to read (and write) poetry. Big Grin
Dorothy and Roger 02-17-2005 07:46 PM
Wow.. That was beautiful!

Great job.
RedDestiny 02-22-2005 06:33 PM
They are prettiful! Sad, but still prettiful! ^__^
Pie_Junkie 02-22-2005 08:34 PM
Beautiful,sad,and wonderful poems. Thumbs Up
angelcakes 12-24-2005 09:42 AM
I wanted to write a poem...but I couldn't confine myself with just a few words. It turned into a story...ish...thing...This is based on a reality...a very real reallity...


The pain I hide turns into cold bitter betrayal. What happened to forever? The children we might have had haunt me now, the love I thought we shared hurts me now. Why wasn’t I enough?

A kiss here, “don’t worry I love you” is the story. To love is to bear, and bear I have. I bore the burdens of your lies; I bore the pain of you indecision.

Do you want to be free? I will set you free if that is the case. I do not wish to set you free…I do not wish to be alone. You lit my world, you stole my heart, and you broke it and mended it so many times.

Yet I love you with all that I am. How could a love run this deep? How can I love you, but know that I am alone in this love. Do I like the hurt? Do I deserve the hurt? I must, for you have never stopped the hurt.

It hurts to breath my love. It hurts to know I must live with this pain on my soul. I don’t wish to let you go. But you wish to be gone. So you will go, and I will scream. My soul screams out for you. But you cannot hear me, you are with yet another.

The gaps that you’ve left in my heart have been filled with false loves, fake loves, new people. I try to move on, stop loving you for another. But I cannot, for you are the only one for me. I decided this long ago.

So as I write this and hold back this feeling of sorrow, hold back the tears that I thought I could no longer cry, I will let you go. I will love you from a far.

Please…come back. I can’t take it…don’t leave me…don’t leave me…I am so lost…so broken…I love you…come back…come back…
Asirt 12-24-2005 01:08 PM
Very nice job, angelcakes. From the choice of words you used, it was able to show me the emotions of sadness and sorrow in this poem. It delivers a deep message to the reader. Great job, overall. Smile

On an unrelated note, the last few parts of the poem reminded me of AIR: The Motion Picture. Just a feeling, you know? Wink